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So beautiful
so empty
so loved
so used
Poor fragile girl
Alone in the spotlight
For all to see
For all to judge
They fuck her
And leave her
Beat her
And break her
You think she's so happy
And hate her for being wanted
You call her a bitch
You call her a whore
Not knowing
That deep in her heart
The torment never ends
They find her in slumber
Haunting her dreams
So lost and confused
No plave to hide
Sharp blades
And blissful highs
Bring only temporary relief
Because when her wounds heal
And the highs fade
She still has nothing
Just an empty heart
And a pretty face
But a pretty face has no use
Splattered on the wall
©2006-2009 ~AsBloodyTearsFall
:iconasbloodytearsfall:

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its about being the school whore who has a pretty face and uses it to her advantage to numb her pain until she realizes it only deepens the wound

Its been a while since i've written, so be nice, cuz i know its not that great, its just how ive been feeling

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:icontryhonesty417:
I think you have a pretty face:petting:
:iconjustinj:
Hahah. That icon makes me giggle.
:iconjustinj:
Not bad Megan.

I suppose it DOES have a lighter note compared to others.

I believe that the "plave" should be place.

Is this about Amanda I?
:iconasbloodytearsfall:
No this is about me lol, and ty ill change it, Buttt since your the only person that actually helps me work on my writing, i dont feel like the middle or end flow very well, any ideas to improve?

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:skullbones: To live is to die :blackrose:
:iconjustinj:
Well, Id say, you should change the line " they find her in her slumber" to "even in her slumber". I think that it stops flowing around the end. The last line seems kinda random and abrupt, maybe you should change that one.

However, I like the ideas conveyed here, especially in the end, about highs and such, so perhaps you should just play around with the words a bit; maybe look up some alternatives in a thesaurus, and see what flows best.

Hope that helps ya out a little bit.

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